Monday, May 16

Search For Meaning

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Search for meaning a shaky slope
foothills of apathetic thoughts
panoramic brash youth to naught

bridges to nowhere a'frayed rope
an aftermath of passion's path
meager firepits with charred hope

whichever trail to tread we ought?
search for meaning a shaky slope.

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Written for One Stop Monday Form – Octains.

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15 comments:

  1. Love it! I tried to write this form last night and came up with only sarcasm.

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  2. Oh very nicely done! Great word choice and strong message.

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  3. i much like the content of this matt - the structure and rhymes are good some iambic lines - but not all the way through (which is ok - doesn't have to be iambic or trochaic) i love the aftermath of passion's path line a lot and i agree, the search for meaning IS a shaky slope...nice one

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  4. Interesting style. You completed the piece in the right syllabic count which I am beginning to think may be more important than keeping it tetrameter as it makes the symmetry even. (I of course didn't do that :-)) I think this is actually something that is true to my experience. Well done. Gay

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  5. foothills of apathetic thought--enjoy that and the other images you create in this.

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  6. fine Octain Matt. You nailed the form. The hardest part, I realise more and more after seeing now nearly 80 written, is getting that c/c line 5 midline rhyme in without it seeming corny or forced. Eight syllables is not a lot of space and it can come out a little Dr Seuss. You certainly avoided that. Kudos, great job here.

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  7. Fantastic write Matt! Really dig the close ~ Rose

    Don't forget to mention to someone about your gravity soon, we can flash fiction on the interaction ;)

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  8. An aftermath to passions path. good job

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  9. Lovely octain, very persuasive search for meaning!

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  10. meaningful and true to form...good poem.

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  11. This floats my boat. You did well with the form, yet kept your own finger print on it.

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  12. Simply wonderful. Wish I could be that good in short.....

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  13. Hi Matt - How would you feel about me including this Octain in a thread I have running on Facebook - nearing 100 mark now - © retained by you of course and if you're on FB I can tag u in it so u can see all Octains written so far. Or else I can email you the entire thing. My FB account is on my sidebar of my blog. No probs if not. Hit me back - rapture_elk@yahoo.co.uk

    cheers mate

    Luke

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