Monday, May 23

All Hail Finbar McGinn

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All hail peasant finbar mcginn
let me sit ye upon my knee
tell tale of fisher skirr at sea

by yon fire I shall begin
a ship broke, a drake choked
great dragon filleted end to end

dismal demise for uhl feshtee
all hail hero finbar mcginn

all hail high king finbar mcginn
no longer irrelevant flea
this master of royal decree

be wary a splendid shoo-in
daggers and cloaks, some ne'er awoke
power yields sin, 'spite origin

till rebels drowned bastard at sea
all hail tyrant finbar mcginn


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Written in Double Octain form for One Stop Poetry
Lazy this week, so linking this for One Shot Wednesday too.  :D

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19 comments:

  1. This is so clever - the subtle change from peasant to tyrant, the use of the vernacular, and damn fine story-telling. I enjoyed it immensely.

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  2. i second kerry - this was really clever and you made it sound rough like a sea tale - just one line the syllable count is a bit off-track
    daggers and cloaks, some never awoke - has 9 syllables but all the rest looks perfect to me - very nice!!

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  3. Fixed. "Never" to "ne'er". Yay poetic contractions! :D

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  4. nice...love the rhymes...and the tale...filleting the dragon eh...bet that makes for some big steaks...fav line "power yields sin, 'spite origin"

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  5. Very creative word filleting. You've made them jump through hoops and like it--and I like any poem that contains the word yon AND dragons. (I'm just weird that way.) Seriously, enjoyed this, and it was very well put together.

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  6. Matt this is very nice - aye, aye

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  7. Ye spins a rite apt tale...
    Now fetch me some Ale!!!

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  8. A clever poem and tale, well written. It brought to mind a poem I wrote years ago called `Pirate Wench` lol.

    Anita.

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  9. Sounds like the rise and fall of many a politician.

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  10. What a tale you told while keeping the form and rhyme scheme that was set by Luke. I had quite a difficult time with mine and yours seems so easy and well achieved. (bet it wasn't though) So well done you. Excellent job! Thanks, Gay

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  11. Very creative and clever :)

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  12. i love his name just as much as anything. you had me at Finbar McGinn...lol

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  13. Hi Matt

    The vernacular use was perfect and your shifting thoughts and character even more enjoyable.. I liked it so much...

    Shashi
    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/05/whispers-buddha-and-life.html
    At Twitter @VerseEveryDay

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  14. Nice take at the high octain. Very enjoyable.

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  15. Great High Octain Matt, I loved his climb up the ladder all the way off! Great write! ~ Rose

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  16. very nice flow .... yes, power can corrupt and get you cast into the sea ... loved that line on power and origins.

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  17. Oohh... I like that transformation from peasant to tyrant!
    And what with the recent Pirates movie, I am totally IN for the language as well!!

    Much enjoyed this!

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  18. I'll drink a pint in honor of ole'McGinn! Made me feel like I was in a seaside pub in Middle Earth! Love it!

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