Tuesday, May 17

Dearest Darling

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Dearest darling, I agree you should leave:
it makes perfect sense to consider my
unconditional love unattractive.
only another perhaps satisfies

desires I know every aspect of
since I've listened to echoes of your soul.
illusions of perfect consorts above
trump my common tranquility below.

an unassuming penniless poet
absolutely devoted to your whims?
a safety net contains no allurement,
don't regret if trapeze falls to ruin.

my confidence returns, my love hidden,
with resolve I'll complete myself again.

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32 comments:

  1. Wow that's a hard rejection slap in the face kinda poem.
    Who wouldn't want unconditional love???

    Well written my friend

    Moonie

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  2. love the 1st stanza.. what an unappreciative darling.. great poem here.

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  3. Oh... the story is too often true.

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  4. I have written similar sentiments but not as eloquently. Lovely poem.

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  5. Well written. So hard to dust yourself off, get up on the horse, and ride again. But there's no good alternative. Thank you, Gay

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  6. Ohh woww... I guess this undying-unconditional-love is kinda in the air, Matt.. You'll know what I mean when you read my one shot I guess.. hehe

    Anyway, coming back to your poem, it's a bit of sad, a bit of hopeful, and is both sweet and intense at the same time! And I really like such poems! Oh.. and totally LOVED the title!!!

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  7. Matt...
    I have the feeling that you don't need a safety net.
    Great Job!

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  8. Aww nicely written but sad when love is taken for granted...

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  9. Yeah, right. Wouldn't any girl find unconditional love unconditionally boring? As if.

    Nice one, Matt.

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  10. Just enough sarcasm to mask the pain... nice.

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  11. ouch...perhaps you are better off in the end...nice edge to your words matt

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  12. You're much kinder here than I would be. But I agree with brian on who the loser is in this one, and it's not the penniless poet.

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  13. Ah...a common issue for people like us. If I devoted as much time to writing as I would like, I would have similar inspiration I'm quite sure...but that time's coming...I'll let you know if I fair any better!

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  14. oh, this is bitterly sad... i feel the sharp edge to your pain through your words, but there is also hope at the end, "with resolve I'll complete myself again."

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  15. Well written, but hopefully you weren't beating yourself up. Great write.

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  16. The flow and subtle rhyme scheme make this a very attractive piece. The message is at once bitter and triumphant. Nicely done.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/05/16/as-i-am-meant-to-be/

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  17. Dearest Darling, you're great, goodbye, I'm better for it. Or I will be.

    Really liked this, Matt. Nice piece. Thank you.

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  18. well done! I love the way you turn a phrase.

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  19. Nice work! A solid, slap-in-the-face commentary. If you don't appreciate what I give, you don't deserve it. Great.

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  20. Powerful and I can certainly and unfortunately relate. Magnificently written. Where is the like button on your page?

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  21. Every line dripped with sarcasm... and I loved it!
    An unappreciated lover has every right to point out the ingratitude while showing his ex- the door.

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  22. I like this a lot. Nice take on sounding like a love letter, but actually saying goodbye and good riddance.

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  23. i agree with so many sentiments left here...very well written..cheers pete

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  24. Another great write Matt.

    "illusions of perfect consorts above
    trump my common tranquility below."

    my favorite couplet, and there are many to enjoy here. I also loved the end, the moment of love thyself. Again you bring poetic joy in your words to my day ~ Rose

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  25. Well-written piece. Here is mine: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com/2011/05/18/game-over/

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  26. "echoes of your soul"...deep expression

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  27. Interesting, I didn't read this as the one rejected, but more as the one rejecting. "You don't want my love? Fine - bye!" Excellent write nonetheless.

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  28. I'm not really good at "reading" sarcasm...so forgive me if I missed your sincerity, but this dripped deliciously with tasty bite of sarcasm. this is one of those poems I'd like to hear to feel its true essence.

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