Tuesday, May 17

Dearest Darling

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Dearest darling, I agree you should leave:
it makes perfect sense to consider my
unconditional love unattractive.
only another perhaps satisfies

desires I know every aspect of
since I've listened to echoes of your soul.
illusions of perfect consorts above
trump my common tranquility below.

an unassuming penniless poet
absolutely devoted to your whims?
a safety net contains no allurement,
don't regret if trapeze falls to ruin.

my confidence returns, my love hidden,
with resolve I'll complete myself again.

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32 comments:

  1. moondustwriterMay 17, 2011 at 2:04 PM

    Wow that's a hard rejection slap in the face kinda poem.
    Who wouldn't want unconditional love???

    Well written my friend

    Moonie

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  2. UnknownMay 17, 2011 at 2:06 PM

    love the 1st stanza.. what an unappreciative darling.. great poem here.

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  3. AnonymousMay 17, 2011 at 2:06 PM

    Oh... the story is too often true.

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  4. Kristina FarrowMay 17, 2011 at 2:06 PM

    I have written similar sentiments but not as eloquently. Lovely poem.

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  5. TimoteoMay 17, 2011 at 2:09 PM

    Play hard to get next time?

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  6. BeachannyMay 17, 2011 at 2:10 PM

    Well written. So hard to dust yourself off, get up on the horse, and ride again. But there's no good alternative. Thank you, Gay

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  7. KavitaMay 17, 2011 at 2:10 PM

    Ohh woww... I guess this undying-unconditional-love is kinda in the air, Matt.. You'll know what I mean when you read my one shot I guess.. hehe

    Anyway, coming back to your poem, it's a bit of sad, a bit of hopeful, and is both sweet and intense at the same time! And I really like such poems! Oh.. and totally LOVED the title!!!

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  8. G-ManMay 17, 2011 at 2:16 PM

    Matt...
    I have the feeling that you don't need a safety net.
    Great Job!

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  9. ayalaMay 17, 2011 at 2:22 PM

    Aww nicely written but sad when love is taken for granted...

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  10. PattiKenMay 17, 2011 at 2:24 PM

    Yeah, right. Wouldn't any girl find unconditional love unconditionally boring? As if.

    Nice one, Matt.

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  11. Randy BehaviorMay 17, 2011 at 2:29 PM

    Just enough sarcasm to mask the pain... nice.

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  12. Brian MillerMay 17, 2011 at 2:42 PM

    ouch...perhaps you are better off in the end...nice edge to your words matt

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  13. hedgewitchMay 17, 2011 at 2:46 PM

    You're much kinder here than I would be. But I agree with brian on who the loser is in this one, and it's not the penniless poet.

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  14. TashtooMay 17, 2011 at 4:25 PM

    Ah...a common issue for people like us. If I devoted as much time to writing as I would like, I would have similar inspiration I'm quite sure...but that time's coming...I'll let you know if I fair any better!

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  15. LeslieMay 17, 2011 at 5:34 PM

    oh, this is bitterly sad... i feel the sharp edge to your pain through your words, but there is also hope at the end, "with resolve I'll complete myself again."

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  16. Henry ClemmonsMay 17, 2011 at 6:16 PM

    Well written, but hopefully you weren't beating yourself up. Great write.

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  17. Jonny SMay 17, 2011 at 6:35 PM

    Nice parting words

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  18. UnknownMay 17, 2011 at 6:40 PM

    The flow and subtle rhyme scheme make this a very attractive piece. The message is at once bitter and triumphant. Nicely done.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/05/16/as-i-am-meant-to-be/

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  19. Joe HeschMay 17, 2011 at 7:12 PM

    Dearest Darling, you're great, goodbye, I'm better for it. Or I will be.

    Really liked this, Matt. Nice piece. Thank you.

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  20. Apryl GonzalesMay 17, 2011 at 10:08 PM

    well done! I love the way you turn a phrase.

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  21. PennyMay 17, 2011 at 10:16 PM

    Nice work! A solid, slap-in-the-face commentary. If you don't appreciate what I give, you don't deserve it. Great.

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  22. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 12:11 AM

    well done.

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  23. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 2:08 AM

    Powerful and I can certainly and unfortunately relate. Magnificently written. Where is the like button on your page?

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  24. Kerry O'ConnorMay 18, 2011 at 6:50 AM

    Every line dripped with sarcasm... and I loved it!
    An unappreciated lover has every right to point out the ingratitude while showing his ex- the door.

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  25. Vernon Wildy Jr.May 18, 2011 at 6:51 AM

    I like this a lot. Nice take on sounding like a love letter, but actually saying goodbye and good riddance.

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  26. MarshyMay 18, 2011 at 6:53 AM

    i agree with so many sentiments left here...very well written..cheers pete

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  27. UnknownMay 18, 2011 at 8:06 AM

    Another great write Matt.

    "illusions of perfect consorts above
    trump my common tranquility below."

    my favorite couplet, and there are many to enjoy here. I also loved the end, the moment of love thyself. Again you bring poetic joy in your words to my day ~ Rose

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  28. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 8:22 AM

    Well-written piece. Here is mine: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com/2011/05/18/game-over/

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  29. aparnaMay 18, 2011 at 11:22 PM

    "echoes of your soul"...deep expression

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  30. RaivenneMay 19, 2011 at 6:23 AM

    Interesting, I didn't read this as the one rejected, but more as the one rejecting. "You don't want my love? Fine - bye!" Excellent write nonetheless.

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  31. Madeleine Begun KaneMay 22, 2011 at 11:16 PM

    Very well written!

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  32. rmpWritingsMay 23, 2011 at 4:29 PM

    I'm not really good at "reading" sarcasm...so forgive me if I missed your sincerity, but this dripped deliciously with tasty bite of sarcasm. this is one of those poems I'd like to hear to feel its true essence.

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